Roy Williams stared at the scoreboard and hung his head as the he saw the pathetic 57 points under the UNC name. On the other side, a proud 90 points shown under their opponent’s name, Florida State. UNC men’s basketball, ranked number eight in the country had just lost to an unranked team. The only thought on Coach Williams’ mind was “this could get ugly.” He instantly thought to get his team to the locker room. He began to shuffled the huge athletes off the court when suddenly he heard his assistant coach yelling at him. He then looked up to the scoreboard and saw that there was still 14.2 seconds on the clock. He began hearing fans yelling rude remarks at him. Not only did he just lose a seemingly easy game, but now he appears to be showing sign of a sore loser and walking out of the game and leaving his 5 players out there with no respect for them, or Florida State. Williams tried to usher his team back toward the bench, but the damage had been done. All he could think now was, “this isn’t going to look good.” And he was right. After a public apology to his players that were left out on the court, he felt the only way to explain his actions was to stress that he was just trying to get his team into the locker room safely. He did not realize there was still time on the clock and made an unfortunate mistake but did not mean any disrespect by it. But the real question remains, will the public and the UNC basketball fans believe him?
This is the real article: http://espn.go.com/mens-college-basketball/story/_/id/7469169/roy-williams-unc-tar-heels-says-apologized-players-left-court-florida-state-seminoles
Nice, Bri! I love me some good sports narratives. I think it starts off strong, for sure. I'd suggest that after you show us the 14.2 seconds on the clock, you let us actually hear the audiences profanity. Put it in dialogue. In quotes and then show us how he reacts -- does he bat them away, shrug his shoulders, stand up straight, flex his chest muscles? Give us the visceral details of the scene, put us in the action. How does his body respond? I'd also end the scene at "And he was right." Nicely done.
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